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Ayana's avatar

A couple things:

1. Your short story left me wondering what happens next. I’m no expert but I think that means it’s a good story lol

2. Kevin was definitely onto something lol I didn’t notice there were no adjectives til you mentioned it but I did notice the difference in pace and I liked it. Don’t get me wrong, I love reading and listening to the way you describe things. In fact, it’s one of my favorite things about you😌 but I also think it’s cool that I can still have a clear image in my head as I’m reading without anything being described to me with adjectives.

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Michael Moore's avatar

1. Thank you <3

2. I'm glad you liked it, too much description can take away from readers' imagination!

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David's avatar

Exactly!

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David's avatar

I liked the short story. It was fun and I liked it's pace. I never really truly understood adjectives. I mean I know the definition, but if one jumped up and bit me I wouldn't know it was an adjective. It's brilliant that you can not only understand it but use it with purpose. This probably explains why math and technology comes easy to me, because I don't really get language arts. That is the art of language. Keep going. I'm starting to wonder what's on your post today. Oh my! 😊

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Michael Moore's avatar

Something that helps me remember is that adjectives (and adverbs) are not necessary to make a complete sentence. E.g. "The loud man drives fast" vs. "The man drives". Thank you for the support! <3

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Christy's avatar

Does the lady calling him Tiny count as an adjective? Or is it just his name? :)

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Michael Moore's avatar

Good catch! In this instance, she's teasing him about his name haha :)

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Jason's avatar

Advice that has helped me: Less is more. Show not tell. Not sure how these would fit into fiction but interesting to ponder.

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Michael Moore's avatar

That's great advice! It's the very premise of this exercise

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